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Posted: Mon Sep 17, 2007 3:37 pm Post subject: Observations
Observations
Strands of seaweed cast on flat wet sand,
a scribbled message left for those who pass.
Pale lichen on an ancient granite wall,
a patch for the past of a troubled land.
Sunshine, blossoms scattered on the grass,
venerating Springtime as they fall.
Posted: Wed Sep 19, 2007 12:19 pm Post subject: Wow
Twiggy, this is a beautiful piece you're written. I've read it many times and still feel moved by it. And that it the ultimate goal, isn't it? To move the reader, to make the reader think. You've accomplished that. Have you considered having it published?
Have you considered making it the start of a larger piece?
Posted: Wed Oct 03, 2007 9:10 am Post subject: Re: Wow
admin wrote:
Twiggy, this is a beautiful piece you're written. I've read it many times and still feel moved by it. And that it the ultimate goal, isn't it? To move the reader, to make the reader think. You've accomplished that. Have you considered having it published?
Have you considered making it the start of a larger piece?
Making it the start of a larger piece is a problem, as the three couplets in it are unrelated. It has no focus.
As for publication, do you have thoughts? You also mentioned this in regard to another piece I posted.
Unfortunately, publishing poetry is usually without a payment. It isn't given the same opportunities as other forms of writing.
You need to establish what your goals are and what you want to achieve. If you're interested in making a name for yourself then there are many magazines that publish freelance poetry. Payment is usually a copy of the magazine - if they offer payment. If this interests you then here is a short list of a few web sites:
You could try entering competitions. They offer you the opportunity to see your progress (which is represented in how close to the winner you get), you can become well known as a poet, and the winner is usually rewarded.
You could self-publish a collect of your work, but this can get expensive so think carefully about this option.
Posted: Sun Oct 14, 2007 8:32 pm Post subject: Re: Observations
Twiggy wrote:
Observations
Strands of seaweed cast on flat wet sand,
a scribbled message left for those who pass.
Pale lichen on an ancient granite wall,
a patch for the past of a troubled land.
Sunshine, blossoms scattered on the grass,
venerating Springtime as they fall.
This form isn't hard to write.
First you describe an image, something that you see, in one line, perhaps "Strands of seaweed on flat wet sand," as in line one above. (Line three or line five are other examples.) Then you write a line of what it makes you think of, what it reminds you of. So you have two lines, a couplet, in a style made known by Ezra Pound. All I've done is write three of these, but they aren't related to each other.
Someone might like to experiment writing a series of these couplets that are all about one subject. A cat? Rain? Autumn? Something that will give you a number of images.
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